Kathleen said: Paragraph 5 -- is that a question or should it be a statement? 4th P from the Bottom -- try an elipse <...> between the 1st and second sentence in the second part of your dialog. Good conversation. Good use of descriptions to let the reader know how Douglas is tongue tied, etc. It is a sweet moment between the lovers. Good job. :lol: Thanks for the comments! Paragraph 5 is definitely a statement. Good catch on the ellipse--I think it will work there. Appreciated!